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Blood in the water,
Blood in the sand.

In the land of my Father,
Cold steel in my hand.

I creep through the night,
Death in my mind.

To be the last sight,
Of those that I find.

I cling to the dark,
The Moon won't betray.

I locate my mark,
Bring an end to his day.

I pounce from behind,
I stab with my knife.

To his pain I am blind,
As I bleed out his life.

He draws a last breath,
I look to his eyes.

I'm a dealer of death,
A task I despise.
©2006-2009 ~JohnnyUwibami
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Nice rhymes.

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People aren't chocolates. D'you know what they are? Bastards. Bastard coated bastards with bastard-y centers.
Interesting rhyming pattern, though it probably only looks so due to it being spilt into two line paragraphs.

Nice job, nice rhymes!

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...The meek shall inherit the Earth...

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... omg ..... I love it.... T.T so sad .... I still love it ...

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*TUG TUG* ... ah yes the good old days...
that's so beautiful...I love it...
OHHH I LOVE IT
ITS KINDA SAD THO BUT ITS KOOL
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BUM...BUM...BUM...

BYE.....

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I really like the action.

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Thanks

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I've spent 99% of my money on wine, women and song. The rest I wasted.
Wow, great storytelling in poetic form. This should technically be in fixed though, not open, as you have a specific rhyme pattern and a meter as well. This is a very well written piece, I like it a lot :)

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The void breathed hard on my heart, turning its illusions to ice, shattering them. --Rorschach, Watchmen
Thank you very much. Yeah, I realize it should be in fixed now. I don't know that I was even aware of what category I put it in initially.

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I've spent 99% of my money on wine, women and song. The rest I wasted.

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